The Air in Me Releases Pain

The Air in Me Releases Pain

As I wrote in my blog last week the art of writing Haiku and Senryu are bound only by 17 syllables, nature and the human heart. Writing Haiku is about the wonders of nature and all its inhabitants.

On the other hand writing 17 syllables about the human condition; and all of its fickleness, flirtations and foibles end up on the page being called Senryu. Senryu, as it is described at the website http://simplyhaiku.com/SHv4n3/senryu/senryu.html is more than satirical writing but it reaches into the human heart to reveal pain, heartbreak, love, loss of love and many more emotions.

Below you will find a Senryu I wrote that depicts the vision of a young woman I sat across from on the bus. This young woman was visibly upset and I kept that vision in my head long enough to get home so I could put pen to paper.

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Young Woman Alone

Young woman alone

Inked tears trail from swollen eyes,

Permanent stains stay.

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To get a deeper sense of what Senryu writing is all about visit http://simplyhaiku.com/SHv4n3/senryu/senryu.html where you’ll find many Senryu that covers a long list of human emotions.

Now, let’s have a little fun.

I am issuing a challenge for you to write a Senryu and send it to me. I’ll even help with the theme.

There has been an awful lot of news about George Zimmerman being acquitted for the shooting of Trayvon Martin. In 17 syllables using the 5-7-5 pattern send me your thoughts on the outcome of the trial.

Send your Senryu to my email address www.dljohnson365@gmail.com in the subject line write Senryu. I will post the top 10 Senryu I receive by July 29, 2013.

Next week I want to introduce you to the really great writing form known as Cinquain.

As always, thanks for reading The Air in Me.

Dan